Suno ki har shakl keh rahi hai kahaani koi,
suno ki har chehre ki ik,apni hi daastan hai
kuchh chehron mein chamak hai sapnon ki,
hein vaade,aur kuchh iraade hein
kuchh khali hein us ghar ki tarah
ki jinke maalik...kahin dur des rehte hein
kuchh udaas biyaaban, or veeran shaklen
akeley sunaypan ki kahaani kehtin...
aawaaz detin roktin pukaarteen,
yeh shaklen,yeh kahaniyan………
Making 'face' a subject of something intense provides greater depth to a work.I usually encounter a single emotion throughout a poem or writing but here you have created a rainbow of emotions.The rolercoaster ride lifts your spirit up, then stagnate at a moment(not words or their impact but emotions, providing a wide variety of choices to the reader to interpret it)and then suddenly show you the nadir of life...All with a 'face' on the face...Ah! marvellous in terms of handling the theme and the incessant flow of imagery...Sir, its a very strong piece...a treasure!!
ReplyDelete@ nidhi at the risk of sounding repetitive,might i say,it is the beauty of your imagination & your mind,that you find these words,'a treasure'....remember the sight is the same as the seer !!! but hey thanx for the kind words dear !!!
ReplyDeleteSir, colours can't be extracted from black...there is this magic in some words that nobody can overpower them, not even a perspective related to them. Neither interpretation nor explanation is required to feel their enchantment! So it's very humble of you that you give the credit to others(here my mind) instead to the original source of creativity (your mind).
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